英訳依頼：Dear Sid san

「Dear Sid san,」はそのまま英語の書き出しとして自然です。 もし少しフォーマルにする場合は、 - Dear Sid, - Dear Mr. Sid,（姓が Sid の場合のみ） - Dear Sid-san,（日本的な敬称を残したい場合） となります。 続きの日本語本文も貼っていただければ、全文を自然なビジネス英語に翻訳します。

先日は、来日時にお会いする機会を作って頂きありがとうございました。初めてFace to faceでお会い出来、また意見交換をすることが出来て、非常に参考になりましたし、より状況などを理解することが出来ました。他方、納期が11月末に遅れる可能性が出てきたとChinさんから聞きました。これは非常に憂慮すべき事態です。ご存じのように、ゲットワークスのお客様は11月稼働開始で何とかご了解頂いていますが、11月末納入の場合、サービスインは12月になると思われ、そうなると最悪の場合キャンセルがあり得る非常事態です。

Dear Sid-san, Thank you very much for taking the time to meet with me during your recent visit to Japan. It was a pleasure to meet you face-to-face for the first time and to have the opportunity to exchange views. Our discussion was extremely valuable, and it helped me gain a much better understanding of the current situation and the challenges involved. On the other hand, I was informed by Chin that there is a possibility that the delivery schedule may slip to the end of November. This is a matter of serious concern for us. As you know, Getworks' customer has agreed to proceed based on a service commencement schedule in November. If the equipment is not delivered until the end of November, the actual service launch is likely to be pushed back to December. In the worst-case scenario, this could lead to a cancellation of the project, which would be an extremely critical situation for all parties involved.

Dear Sid-san,Thank you very much for taking the time to meet with us during your recent visit to Japan. It was a pleasure to meet you face-to-face for the first time and to have the opportunity to exchange views. Our discussion was extremely valuable, and it helped me gain a much better understanding of the current situation and the challenges involved.On the other hand, I was informed by Chin that there is a possibility that the delivery schedule may slip to the end of November. This is a matter of serious concern for us. As you know, Getworks' customer has agreed to proceed based on a service commencement schedule in November. If the equipment is not delivered until the end of November, the actual service launch is likely to be pushed back to December. In the worst-case scenario, this could lead to a cancellation of the project, which would be an extremely critical situation for all parties involved.I would appreciate it very much if you use your best to keep the current schedule of Nov. 16.

最後の一文は少し不自然なので、以下のようにすると自然で丁寧です。 **Dear Sid-san,** Thank you very much for taking the time to meet with us during your recent visit to Japan. It was a pleasure to meet you face-to-face for the first time and to have the opportunity to exchange views. Our discussion was extremely valuable, and it helped me gain a much better understanding of the current situation and the challenges involved. On the other hand, I was informed by Chin that there is a possibility that the delivery schedule may slip to the end of November. This is a matter of serious concern for us. As you know, Getworks' customer has agreed to proceed based on a service commencement schedule in November. If the equipment is not delivered until the end of November, the actual service launch is likely to be pushed back to December. In the worst-case scenario, this could lead to a cancellation of the project, which would be an extremely critical situation for all parties involved. **Therefore, I would greatly appreciate your personal support and best efforts to maintain the current delivery schedule of November 16.** Thank you in advance for your understanding and support. Best regards, Koji Kabumoto ※「I would appreciate it very much if you use your best...」よりも、「I would greatly appreciate your personal support and best efforts to maintain...」の方が英語として自然で、相手に強いお願いをしつつも丁寧な表現になります。

Dear Sid-san,Thank you very much for taking the time to meet with us during your recent visit to Japan. It was a pleasure to meet you face-to-face for the first time and to have the opportunity to exchange views. Our discussion was extremely valuable, and it helped me gain a much better understanding of the current situation and the challenges involved.On the other hand, I was informed by Chin that there is a possibility that the delivery schedule may slip to the end of November. This is a matter of serious concern for us. As you know, Getworks' customer has agreed to proceed based on a service commencement schedule in November. If the equipment is not delivered until the end of November, the actual service launch is likely to be pushed back to December. In the worst-case scenario, this could lead to a cancellation of the project, which would be an extremely critical situation for all parties involved.Therefore, I would greatly appreciate your personal support and best efforts to maintain the current delivery schedule of the week of November 16. Thank you in advance for your understanding and support.Best regards, Koji Kabumoto

とても良い文章です。少しだけ自然さと説得力を高めると、以下のようになります。 > **Dear Sid-san,** > > Thank you very much for taking the time to meet with us during your recent visit to Japan. It was a pleasure to meet you face-to-face for the first time and to have the opportunity to exchange views. Our discussion was extremely valuable, and it helped me gain a much better understanding of the current situation and the challenges involved. > > On the other hand, I was informed by Chin that there is a possibility that the delivery schedule may slip to the end of November. This is a matter of serious concern for us. As you know, Getworks' customer has agreed to proceed based on a service commencement schedule in November. If the equipment is not delivered until the end of November, the actual service launch is likely to be pushed back to December. In the worst-case scenario, this could lead to a cancellation of the project, which would be an extremely critical situation for all parties involved. > > **Therefore, I would greatly appreciate your personal support and best efforts to maintain the current delivery schedule for the week of November 16. Given the significant impact that any delay would have on the project, your assistance in keeping the original timeline would be invaluable.** > > Thank you in advance for your understanding and support. > > Best regards, > **Koji Kabumoto** ポイント： - 「the week of November 16」が正しい表現です。 - 「Given the significant impact...」を加えることで、単なるお願いではなく「なぜ重要なのか」を丁寧に伝えられます。 - 「your assistance ... would be invaluable」は、相手の協力への期待を丁重に表すビジネス英語でよく使われる表現です。

ところで、このメールの題名はどうしたらいいとおもう？

このメールであれば、件名は「お礼＋納期維持のお願い」が伝わるものが良いと思います。 ### 一番おすすめ **Request for Support in Maintaining the November Delivery Schedule** 落ち着いた表現でありながら、お願いの趣旨が明確です。 ### もう少し強め **Urgent Request to Maintain the Delivery Schedule for the Week of November 16** 納期遅延が重大なリスクであることを強調できます。 ### 丁寧で外交的 **Thank You for Meeting in Japan and Request for Your Support on the Delivery Schedule** お礼から入り、その後にお願いがあることが分かります。 ### 経営層向けで最も自然 **Appreciation for Our Meeting and Request for Your Support** 本文を読ませるタイプの件名です。Sidさんとの関係性を考えると最も上品です。 ### 危機感を伝えるなら **Potential Impact of Delivery Delay and Request for Your Support** 納期遅延による顧客キャンセルリスクを暗に示せます。 私なら今回の内容であれば、 **Request for Support in Maintaining the November Delivery Schedule** または **Thank You for Meeting in Japan and Request for Your Support on the Delivery Schedule** を選びます。後者の方が柔らかく、前者の方が要件が一目で伝わります。経営層同士のメールなら後者が特に良いと思います。