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英語で後から思いつくようなことがあったり、やはり英語の問題もあって会議では理解が十分できなかったことをメールで確認しようとしていると理解している。

自然なビジネス英語であれば、次のように表現できます。 > **My understanding is that she is trying to follow up by email because additional questions have come to mind after the meeting and, partly due to the language barrier, she feels she may not have fully understood everything that was discussed during the meeting.** もう少しフォーマルにする場合： > **My understanding is that, after the meeting, she thought of a number of additional points and would like to clarify them by email. I also understand that, due in part to the language barrier, she may not have been able to fully comprehend all aspects of the discussion during the meeting.** 少し柔らかく相手に配慮した表現なら： > **My understanding is that she would like to confirm a few points by email, as some additional questions came to mind after the meeting and she may not have had a chance to fully absorb all of the discussion given that it took place in English.**

英語で TeamはAspirationnoは後から思いつくようなことがあったり、やはり英語の問題もあって会議では理解が十分できなかったことをメールで確認しようとしていると理解している。今後、出来る限り会議内で疑問点を解決するように指示はしました。‌

自然でビジネス向けの英語にすると、以下のようになります。 > **My understanding is that the Aspiration team has been trying to follow up and confirm certain points by email because additional questions often come to mind after the meetings and, due in part to the language barrier, they may not always fully understand everything discussed during the meetings. I have instructed them to make every effort to raise and resolve any questions during the meetings going forward.** もう少しフォーマルな表現なら、 > **My understanding is that the Aspiration team has been seeking clarification via email on points that either occurred to them after the meetings or were not fully understood during the discussions, partly because of the language barrier. I have advised them to make every effort to address and resolve any outstanding questions during the meetings themselves going forward.** こちらの方が相手に対する配慮があり、ビジネスメールでは使いやすい表現です。

この会話を停止しました。

英語で 少し誤解があるようだが、江口さんと井堂さんはAspirationnoの石塚氏を交えて、9月23日（水）にShawnとRiaanとオンライン会議をやっている。今回の質問については、会議の後にShawnからNTT ATへのProposalが送られて来て、その書類をベースに石塚氏と会議を行ってあのメールを出すことになったようだ。今後の進め方だが基本的に週一回のオンライン会議でやりたいと思っている。ただ、後から思いつくようなことがあったり、やはり英語の問題もあって会議では理解が十分できなかったことをメールで確認しようとしていると理解している。ただ今後は出来る限り会議内で疑問点を解決するように指示はしました。‌

自然なビジネス英語にすると、以下のようになります。 > There seems to be a slight misunderstanding. <PRIVATE_PERSON> and <PRIVATE_PERSON>, together with Mr. Ishizuka of Aspiration, held an online meeting with Shawn and Riaan on Wednesday, September 23. > > Regarding the questions raised this time, Shawn sent a proposal to NTT AT after the meeting. Based on that proposal, Mr. Ishizuka reviewed the document with the team, and it appears that this led to the email being sent. > > As for how we proceed going forward, I would like to keep our discussions primarily through a weekly online meeting. That said, I understand that additional questions sometimes come to mind after the meeting and that, due to the language barrier, some points may not have been fully understood during the discussion. As a result, they have been trying to confirm such points by email afterward. > > However, I have advised the team to make every effort to raise and resolve any questions during the meeting itself whenever possible.

There seems to be a slight misunderstanding. Eguchi san and Ido san, together with Mr. Ishizuka of Aspiration, held an online meeting with Shawn and Riaan on Wednesday, September 23.Regarding the questions raised this time, Shawn sent a proposal to NTT AT after the meeting and based on that proposal, Mr. Ishizuka and Eguchi san reviewed the proposal, and decided to send the email.As for how we proceed going forward, I would like to keep our discussions primarily through a weekly online meeting. That said, I understand that additional questions sometimes come to mind after the meeting and that, due to the language barrier, some points may not have been fully understood during the discussion. As a result, they have been trying to confirm such points by email afterward.However, I have advised the team to make every effort to raise and resolve any questions during the meeting itself whenever possible.

英語としては十分通じますが、少しだけ自然でビジネスライクに整えると以下のようになります。 > There seems to be a slight misunderstanding. Eguchi-san and Ido-san, together with Mr. Ishizuka of Aspiration, held an online meeting with Shawn and Riaan on September 23. > > Regarding the questions raised this time, Shawn sent a proposal to NTT AT after the meeting. Based on that proposal, Mr. Ishizuka and Eguchi-san reviewed the document and subsequently decided to send the email. > > As for how we proceed going forward, I would like to keep our discussions primarily within a weekly online meeting. That said, I understand that additional questions may arise after the meeting and that, due to the language barrier, some points may not have been fully understood during the discussion. As a result, they have been trying to clarify such points by email afterward. > > However, I have instructed the team to make every effort to raise and resolve any questions during the meeting itself whenever possible. より経営層向けに少し柔らかくするなら、 > **However, I have encouraged the team to make every effort to address and resolve any questions during the meeting itself whenever possible.** の方が "instructed" より穏当で外交的な印象になります。通常、海外パートナー宛であれば **encouraged** の方が好まれることが多いです。

There seems to be a slight misunderstanding. Eguchi-san and Ido-san, together with Mr. Ishizuka of Aspiration, held an online meeting with Shawn and Riaan on September 23.Regarding the questions raised this time, Shawn sent a proposal to NTT AT after the meeting. Based on that proposal, Mr. Ishizuka and Eguchi-san reviewed the document and subsequently decided to send the email to confirm a couple of technical points.As for how we proceed going forward, I again agree to keep our discussions primarily within a weekly online meeting. That said, I understand that additional questions may arise after the meeting and that, due to the language barrier, some points may not have been fully understood during the discussion. As a result, they have been trying to clarify such points by email afterward.However, I have encouraged the team to make every effort to address and resolve any questions during the meeting itself whenever possible and stop using the title of "CRITICAL INQUIRY" which was the title used by Mr. Ishizuka in the first place. Lastly, I wish you have a successful demonstration in California for the US Navy.

かなり良いですが、最後の部分だけ少し強すぎる印象があり、また文法的に修正した方が自然です。 推敲版： > There seems to be a slight misunderstanding. Eguchi-san and Ido-san, together with Mr. Ishizuka of Aspiration, held an online meeting with Shawn and Riaan on September 23. > > Regarding the questions raised this time, Shawn sent a proposal to NTT AT after the meeting. Based on that proposal, Mr. Ishizuka and Eguchi-san reviewed the document and subsequently decided to send the email to confirm a couple of technical points. > > As for how we proceed going forward, I again agree that our discussions should be conducted primarily through a weekly online meeting. That said, I understand that additional questions may arise after the meeting and that, due to the language barrier, some points may not have been fully understood during the discussion. As a result, they have been trying to clarify such points by email afterward. > > However, I have encouraged the team to make every effort to address and resolve any questions during the meeting itself whenever possible. I have also asked them to avoid using the subject line **"CRITICAL INQUIRY"**, as that wording may convey a stronger sense of urgency than intended. > > Lastly, I wish you a successful demonstration for the U.S. Navy in California. さらに外交的にするなら、最後の一文は、 > **I have also suggested that they refrain from using the subject line "CRITICAL INQUIRY" in future correspondence, as it may unintentionally create an overly urgent impression.** とすると、Shawn側に配慮しつつ石塚氏を責めているようにも聞こえません。国際ビジネスメールとしてはこちらの表現がお勧めです。

No worries. Please reach out to me whenever you need to.

自然な表現ですが、少しだけ英語らしくするとより洗練されます。 **カジュアルかつ親しみやすい表現** > No worries. Please feel free to reach out to me anytime if you need anything. **ややビジネス寄り** > No worries at all. Please don't hesitate to reach out if there's anything I can help with. **今回のメールの流れに合う、温かみのある締め** > No worries at all. Please feel free to reach out to me whenever you need to. I'm always happy to help. なお、 > **I wish you have a successful demonstration...** は文法的には > **I wish you a successful demonstration...** または > **I hope you have a successful demonstration...** が正しい表現です。 締めとしては次が自然です。 > **Lastly, I wish you a successful demonstration for the U.S. Navy in California. Please feel free to reach out to me whenever you need to.**

Dear Eric san,No worries. Please feel free to reach out to me anytime if you need anything. I understand your points but please allow me to explain what happened this time. Eguchi-san and Ido-san, together with Mr. Ishizuka of Aspiration, held an online meeting with Shawn and Riaan on September 23 (Wed. Japan time).Regarding the questions raised this time, Shawn sent a proposal to NTT AT after the meeting. Based on that proposal, Mr. Ishizuka and Eguchi-san reviewed the document and subsequently decided to send the email to confirm a couple of technical points.As for how we proceed going forward, I again agree that our discussions should be conducted primarily through a weekly online meeting. That said, I understand that additional questions may arise after the meeting and that, due to the language barrier, some points may not have been fully understood during the discussion. As a result, they have been trying to clarify such points by email afterward.However, I have encouraged the team to make every effort to address and resolve any questions during the meeting itself whenever possible. I have also suggested that they refrain from using the subject line "CRITICAL INQUIRY" in future correspondence, as it may unintentionally create an overly urgent impression.Lastly, I wish you a successful demonstration for the U.S. Navy in California.

とても自然でプロフェッショナルな内容です。細かい点だけ修正すると、よりネイティブらしく、かつ相手への配慮が伝わる文章になります。 > Dear Eric, > > No worries at all. Please feel free to reach out to me anytime if you need anything. > > I understand your concerns, but please allow me to explain what happened in this particular case. > > Eguchi-san and Ido-san, together with Mr. Ishizuka of Aspiration, held an online meeting with Shawn and Riaan on September 23 (Wednesday, Japan time). > > Regarding the questions raised this time, Shawn sent a proposal to NTT AT after the meeting. Based on that proposal, Mr. Ishizuka and Eguchi-san reviewed the document and subsequently decided to send an email to confirm a couple of technical points. > > As for how we proceed going forward, I agree that our discussions should be conducted primarily through a weekly online meeting. That said, I understand that additional questions may arise after the meeting and that, due to the language barrier, some points may not have been fully understood during the discussion. As a result, they have occasionally tried to clarify such points by email afterward. > > However, I have encouraged the team to make every effort to raise and resolve any questions during the meeting itself whenever possible. I have also suggested that they refrain from using the subject line **"CRITICAL INQUIRY"** in future correspondence, as it may unintentionally convey a stronger sense of urgency than intended. > > Lastly, I wish you a successful demonstration for the U.S. Navy in California. I look forward to hearing that it went well. > > Best regards, > > Koji 主な修正点は以下のとおりです。 - **I understand your points** → **I understand your concerns** （相手の問題意識や懸念に理解を示す場合はこちらが自然） - **send the email** → **send an email** （特定のメールを指していないので冠詞が自然） - **they have been trying to clarify** → **they have occasionally tried to clarify** （継続的に繰り返している印象を弱め、やや穏当） - **convey a stronger sense of urgency than intended** （"overly urgent impression" よりビジネスメールでよく使われる表現） このまま送っても十分に丁寧で建設的なトーンになっています。特に Eric 氏の懸念を認めながらも、Aspiration 側を過度に弁護せず、今後の改善策も示しているため、バランスの取れたメールになっています。

Dear Eric,No worries at all. Please feel free to reach out to me anytime if you need anything.I understand your concerns. Please let me try to explain what happened in this particular case, just a little bit.Eguchi-san and Ido-san, together with Mr. Ishizuka of Aspiration, held an online meeting with Shawn and Riaan on September 23 (Wednesday, Japan time).Regarding the questions raised this time, Shawn sent a proposal to NTT AT after the meeting. Based on that proposal, Mr. Ishizuka and Eguchi-san reviewed the document and subsequently decided to send an email to confirm a couple of technical points.As for how we proceed going forward, I agree that our discussions should be conducted primarily through a weekly online meeting. That said, I understand that additional questions may arise after the meeting and that, due to the language barrier, some points may not have been fully understood during the discussion. As a result, they have occasionally tried to clarify such points by email afterward.However, I have encouraged the team to make every effort to raise and resolve any questions during the meeting itself whenever possible. I have also suggested that they refrain from using the subject line "CRITICAL INQUIRY" in future correspondence, as it may unintentionally convey a stronger sense of urgency than intended.Lastly, I wish you a successful demonstration for the U.S. Navy in California. I look forward to hearing that it went well.Best regards,

全体として非常によく書けています。ネイティブのビジネスメールとしては、冒頭の一文だけを少し自然にするとさらに良くなります。 > **Please let me try to explain what happened in this particular case, just a little bit.** は少し直訳調なので、以下のいずれかがお勧めです。 **最も自然** > **Please allow me to provide a little more context regarding what happened in this particular case.** **少し柔らかい** > **Please let me provide a bit more background on what happened in this particular case.** **シンプル** > **Please allow me to explain what happened in this particular case.** また、 > **I understand your concerns.** よりも、 > **I understand your concerns and appreciate your feedback.** とすると、相手の指摘を受け止めつつ反論ではなく説明であることが伝わります。 私なら最終版は以下の冒頭にします。 > Dear Eric, > > No worries at all. Please feel free to reach out to me anytime if you need anything. > > I understand your concerns and appreciate your feedback. Please allow me to provide a little more context regarding what happened in this particular case. それ以降の本文はそのままで問題ありません。 最後の締めも自然です。 > Lastly, I wish you a successful demonstration for the U.S. Navy in California. I look forward to hearing that it went well. は温かみがあり、Ericとの関係性を考えると非常に良い締め方です。