訪問と会議調整の提案

添削してDear CK san,I think that I had better visit VGS to talk to Vy directly.For some reason, she became very stubborn and requesting a meeting with me.I do not think that I am in a position to dictate the daily company operation but an employees's feeling, concerns or disappointment, etc can be changed when the employee become to aware that all management are diligently hearing their voices.As there is a language barrier, I may request Mr. Trọng's attendance which may also help her not to repeat her story many times. I look forward to hearing from you.Best regards,Koji Kabumoto

より自然でビジネスライクな英語にすると、以下のようになります。 > **Dear CK,** > > I believe it would be best for me to visit VGS and speak with Vy directly. > > For some reason, she has become quite adamant and has specifically requested a meeting with me. > > While I do not believe it is my role to direct the company's day-to-day operations, employees' feelings, concerns, and frustrations can often change when they see that management is making a sincere effort to listen to their voices and understand their perspectives. > > Given the language barrier, I may ask Mr. Trọng to join the meeting. His presence may also help avoid having Vy repeat the same explanations multiple times. > > I look forward to hearing your thoughts. > > **Best regards,** > Koji Kabumoto ### 主な修正点 **表現の自然化** - *I had better visit VGS* → **I believe it would be best for me to visit VGS** - 「〜した方がよい」よりも柔らかく、経営者同士のやりとりに適した表現です。 - *became very stubborn* → **has become quite adamant** - *stubborn* はやや否定的で感情的な響きがあるため、ビジネス文書では *adamant* の方が無難です。 - *requesting a meeting with me* → **has specifically requested a meeting with me** - 現在の状況を自然に表現。 **文法修正** - *an employees's feeling* → **employees' feelings** - *become to aware* → **become aware** - *all management are diligently hearing their voices* → **management is making a sincere effort to listen to their voices** **トーン改善** - 「彼女が頑固になった」という印象を弱めつつ、「強い意向を持っている」という意味を維持。 - 「社員の声を聞くことの重要性」をより前向きなマネジメントメッセージとして表現。 よりCKとの関係が近く、経営者同士らしいトーンにするなら、 > *For some reason, she seems quite determined and has specifically asked to meet with me.* とすると、さらに柔らかく外交的な表現になります。