英文の契約更新表現を添削

添削してThank you for your understanding and we will move forward renewing the existing contract with JSAT first.

より自然な英語にすると、以下がおすすめです。 **Thank you for your understanding. We will proceed with renewing the existing contract with JSAT first.** よりフォーマルにする場合は、 **Thank you for your understanding. We will move forward with renewing the existing contract with JSAT as the first step.** ポイント: - **move forward renewing** → **move forward with renewing** が正しい形です。 - 「まずは既存契約の更新を進める」という意味なら、**proceed with renewing** の方が自然です。 - ビジネスメールでは、1文を2文に分けた方が読みやすく、丁寧な印象になります。

In the meantime, thanks to your visit to NRI and NTT Data when you were here last time, they became to understand our Isidore much better than before. Having said so, they still do not know where and how the most effective way for enterprises (especially financial institutions) to introduce Isidore. We are very much looking forward to attending the the Friday’s training to learn those application from network point of view.

より自然でプロフェッショナルな英語にすると、以下のようになります。 > **In the meantime, thanks to your visits to NRI and NTT DATA during your last trip to Japan, they now have a much better understanding of Isidore than before. Having said that, they still need a clearer understanding of where and how Isidore can be most effectively deployed within enterprises, particularly in financial institutions. We are very much looking forward to Friday's training session, as it will help us better understand these use cases from a network and infrastructure perspective.** 主な修正点： - **became to understand** → **now have a much better understanding of**（自然な表現） - **our Isidore** → **Isidore**（通常は所有格を付けない） - **where and how the most effective way** → **where and how Isidore can be most effectively deployed**（文法的に自然） - **attending the the Friday's training** → **attending Friday's training session** - **learn those application** → **understand these use cases** - **from network point of view** → **from a network and infrastructure perspective** さらに少し前向きでビジネスライクにするなら、 > **In the meantime, thanks to your visits to NRI and NTT DATA during your last trip to Japan, they have gained a much deeper understanding of Isidore. However, they are still exploring the most effective use cases and deployment strategies for enterprises, particularly in the financial sector. We are very much looking forward to Friday's training session, as we hope it will provide valuable insights into practical applications from a network and infrastructure perspective.** こちらの方が、パートナー向けのメールとしてはより洗練された印象になります。

In the meantime, thanks to your visits to NRI and NTT DATA during your last trip to Japan, they now have a much better understanding of Isidore with new features (global IP) than before. Having said that, they still need a clearer understanding of where and how Isidore can be most effectively deployed within enterprises, particularly in financial institutionsfrom a network and infrastructure perspective. We are very much looking forward to Friday's training session, as it will help us better understand these use cases, too.

少し自然にすると、以下のようになります。 > **In the meantime, thanks to your visits to NRI and NTT DATA during your last trip to Japan, they now have a much better understanding of Isidore and its new Global IP feature. Having said that, they still need a clearer understanding of where and how Isidore can be most effectively deployed within enterprises, particularly in financial institutions, from a network and infrastructure perspective. We are very much looking forward to Friday's training session, as it will help us better understand these use cases as well.** よりビジネスメールらしく、少し洗練された表現にするなら、 > **In the meantime, thanks to your visits to NRI and NTT DATA during your last trip to Japan, they have gained a much better understanding of Isidore, particularly its new Global IP capability. However, they are still seeking a clearer view of the most effective use cases and deployment scenarios within enterprises, especially financial institutions, from a network and infrastructure perspective. We are very much looking forward to Friday's training session, as it will help us deepen our understanding of these use cases as well.** 主な修正点: - **Isidore with new features (global IP)** → **Isidore and its new Global IP feature/capability** - **financial institutionsfrom** → **financial institutions, from** - **Having said that** よりも **However** の方がビジネス文書で自然 - **understand these use cases, too** → **deepen our understanding of these use cases as well** の方が洗練された印象です。

In the meantime, thanks to your visits to NRI and NTT DATA during your last trip to Japan, they now have a much better understanding of Isidore having a new Global IP feature. Having said that, they still need a clearer understanding of where and how Isidore can be most effectively deployed within enterprises, particularly in financial institutions, from a network and infrastructure perspective. We are very much looking forward to Friday's training session, as it will help us better understand these use cases as well.

ほぼ問題ありませんが、**"Isidore having a new Global IP feature"** がやや不自然です。英語では「新機能を備えている」は **with its new Global IP feature** や **including its new Global IP feature** の方が自然です。 おすすめは以下です。 > **In the meantime, thanks to your visits to NRI and NTT DATA during your last trip to Japan, they now have a much better understanding of Isidore, including its new Global IP feature. Having said that, they still need a clearer understanding of where and how Isidore can be most effectively deployed within enterprises, particularly in financial institutions, from a network and infrastructure perspective. We are very much looking forward to Friday's training session, as it will help us better understand these use cases as well.** より自然で少し洗練させるなら、 > **In the meantime, thanks to your visits to NRI and NTT DATA during your last trip to Japan, they now have a much better understanding of Isidore, especially with the addition of its new Global IP feature. Having said that, they still need a clearer understanding of where and how Isidore can be most effectively deployed within enterprises, particularly in financial institutions, from a network and infrastructure perspective. We are very much looking forward to Friday's training session, as it will help us better understand these use cases as well.** この文脈なら **"including its new Global IP feature"** が最も自然でビジネスメール向きだと思います。