英文メールの添削依頼

添削してDear Trinh san, We have shipped the signed documents (please refer to the attached signed page) as requested. You may trace the tracking number as the attached. Best regards, Koji Kabumoto

より自然でビジネスメールらしくすると、以下がお勧めです。 > Dear Trinh, > > We have shipped the signed documents as requested. Please find the attached signed signature page for your reference. > > You can track the shipment using the attached tracking information. > > Best regards, > > Koji Kabumoto もう少し丁寧にするなら、 > Dear Trinh, > > As requested, we have shipped the signed documents. Please find the attached signed signature page for your reference. > > You may track the shipment using the tracking information attached. > > Please let us know if you need anything further. > > Best regards, > > Koji Kabumoto **主な修正点** - 「Trinh san」→ 英文メールでは通常 **Dear Trinh,** が自然。 - 「please refer to the attached signed page」→ **Please find the attached signed signature page for your reference** の方が自然。 - 「You may trace the tracking number」→ 英語では **track the shipment** または **track the package** が一般的。Tracking number を "trace" とはあまり言いません。 - 「as the attached」→ **using the attached tracking information** に修正。