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日時: 2026/10/28 15:42:55
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送信者: Microsoft 365 Chat
宛先: Kabumoto Koji（株本幸二） <koji.kabumoto@accrete-inc.com>
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Thread ID: 19:XSACmPRfE88Ly_JQejCG3N5w6Jx4yxlUXftD1oDGuMk1@thread.v2
Message ID: 1793169775572
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カストディアン: koji.kabumoto@accrete-inc.com
取込元: koji.kabumoto@accrete-inc.com.001.pst / TeamsMessagesData / #4334

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意図はかなり明確です。特に①は「不要な情報が含まれているので、提出前に簡略化してほしい」、②は「EY Vietnamへ送る前に自分にも共有してほしい」という点を自然にすると、以下がよいです。

### ① おすすめ：自然で明確
Dear CK san,

I may not have made myself clear. Let me try to explain again as follows:

1) **March 10 Situation Report**  
In your email, you mentioned, “consistent with my situation report of 10 March 2026.” This indicates that there is a situation report dated March 10. That is why Ks Lab has asked us to submit it. **Please simplify the report before submission, as it contains some information that is not necessary for this purpose.**

2) **Board Meeting Minutes**  
My question is whether there were **any board meetings held this year**. If there were, I assume there should be minutes of those meetings. Could you please check whether any such minutes exist and **share them with me before sending them to EY Vietnam?**

Thank you for your help.

Best regards,  
Koji

### ② 少し柔らかく
Dear CK san,

I may not have explained myself clearly. Let me clarify what I mean:

1) **March 10 Situation Report**  
In your email, you mentioned, “consistent with my situation report of 10 March 2026.” This indicates that there is a situation report dated March 10, which is why Ks Lab has asked us to submit it. **As the report may contain information that is not relevant to this particular matter, could you please simplify it before we submit it?**

2) **Board Meeting Minutes**  
My question is whether there were **any board meetings held this year**. If so, I assume there should be minutes of those meetings. Could you please check whether any such minutes exist and **share them with me before they are sent to EY Vietnam?**

Thank you for your help.

Best regards,  
Koji

**修正ポイント:**  
- “it contians” → **“it contains”**
- “we are asked by Ks Lab” → **“Ks Lab has asked us”** の方が自然
- “before you send them to EY Vietnum” → **“before sending them to EY Vietnam”** とすると、指示が強すぎず自然です。
- 監査関連なので、個人的には「unnecessary information」と断定するより、②の **“information that is not relevant to this particular matter”** の方が穏当でおすすめです。

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